User:Oscott101/San Joaquin Valley/JehlianeC Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elysetnguyen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Oscott101/San Joaquin Valley
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * San Joaquin Valley

Evaluate the drafted changes
I liked the way you related air pollution to the class's theme and added a bunch of information regarding its health effects on the people, especially children, and the environment of the Central Valley. I see that there are some slight punctuation issues, such as not spacing after a period, so the only criticism I can give is to clean the section up a bit and make it look more organized and clean. Overall, I enjoyed reading it and it was very informative.