User:Oscott101/San Joaquin Valley/PAPRI01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Oscott101


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Oscott101/sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * San Joaquin Valley
 * San Joaquin Valley

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has been updated, it has a clear introduction. The content is revenant to the topic it relates to health in the environment in the San Joaquin Valley. No it does not deal with a Wikipedia equity gap. The content in neutral it is fact based. This content is up to date. Just add a bit more information on the topic. The sources that were used were good sources and leaned towards being more scientific. These are up to date sources as the oldest one is only two years old. The links work and none show an error. The content is easy to read there are a few words that are spaced too many times just a quick fix. There are no images or media added. Great job clear point to follow!