User:Oscott101/San Joaquin Valley/VivianaOsorioDeJesus Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elysenguyen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Oscott101/San Joaquin Valley


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content
The content is relevant to that article and brings more information to the article.The new information that you put it helps the reader know how the poor air quality affects the communities.

Tone and Balance
The tone seems to be very neutral.

Sources and References
The sources due seem reliable but maybe are out of date,

Organization
The content is very organized and doesn't have much grammatical errors.

Overall Impressions
The strength of this article is great due to be written so strongly.The one thing you could work on is to talk more about how the poor quality air condition affects the overall healthy of children's and what kind of diseases they get from the poor air quality.