User:Osewanne/Assistance for airline passengers with disabilities/Brendalynfigueira Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Assistance for airline passengers with disabilities
 * Assistance for airline passengers with disabilities

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section

The lead section starts out how there are no worldwide regulations which is neutral because it is a fact. try not to go into much detail in the lead section about any place in particular, should be neutral to represent worldwide views. Highlighting those that do provide regulations in the lead is important, but making comparisons to other countries/continents that lack standards can be biased or sound like there is emotion behind it.

Content

Although the United States mentions more detail, I believe that listing the cases does provide information on how the US has made an effort to change their laws. Just focus primarily on what is being done in each continent/country to move towards providing assistance. The EU only has one regulation? Has there been effort to pass more?

Tone and Balance

Tone in the lead section sounds that South America is lesser than the US or the EU since they do not have regulations. Keep a more neutral tone rather than comparing.

Sources and References

Very limited. Latest retrieval date was in 2017, so there have been no updates to reflect any progress other countries have taken within the last 5 years. Are there newer regulations that are being left out?

Organization and writing quality

Limited number of sections.

Images and Media

This article only contains one image. Is this image reflective of what is used to-date?

Talk PageNo discussion, only one comment regarding adding effort to highlight work being done.

Overall Impressions

Overall, this article is fairly weak and provides very limited information. The article does a good job by highlighting the US and EU's regulations, but only provides information on these, does not represent worldwide view.