User:OsoBean/Javier Calvo (actor)/SpaceJam508 Peer Review

I think the Lead section of the article could use some work. The Lead section is what everyone looks at first, especially when in a rush, and need to look at the article quick. I think some further additions to his background would be beneficial because this is a bibliography page. Give some details about where he is from, what his upbringing was like, things along those lines.

I think the introductory sentence is sufficient; it jumps into his profession, birthday... could be a little more creative and really hook the audience with that first sentence.

I think that the content added has been beneficial and up-to-date. I think all of the edits have been up to par with all of Wikipedia's equity gaps. All of the added info address relevant topics in the article.

I like the roadmap that was created in the sandbox. In the specific points where there are bullet points and questions added, I think that that is a great approach to developing the article. Following the guidelines like this will help you create a great article that follows all of Wikipedia's guidelines.

I think that once the article is fully written after finding some more info, it will turn out great and be a very effective article. Nice work.

It lacks a brief description of the article's major sections which I think would be a great addition to the Lead section.

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