User:Ottawaotter2024/Renewable energy in Canada/Joeyslinger1 Peer Review

General info
Ottawaotter2024
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ottawaotter2024/Renewable energy in Canada
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Renewable energy in Canada

Evaluate the drafted changes
Neutrality and Balanced Coverage


 * Added more balance to the article.
 * Written in neutral tone, no "I" statements.
 * Citations for statements such as "power lines to transport energy from Manitoba to Nunavut are also in planning stages." Would make it seem like a fact rather than opinion.
 * While it is an article on Renewable Energy you could add current energy usage in Nunavut or NWT to give perspective.
 * You could add more about Quebec renewable energy as it is one of the leaders in hydro.

Clarity and Structure


 * Clear and concise. Some grammatical/spelling errors, but no run-on sentences.
 * "100% of the territory's electricity..." could be changed to "All of..."
 * "yet there is no such energy pant in"   *-->plant*
 * While you didn't write this you could improve it : " roughly into thirds – 1⁄3 electricity, 1⁄3 heating and 1⁄3 transportation" --> roughly equally between electricity, heating, and transportation

Sources


 * Sources are reliable apart from CBC.
 * Lacks many citations and diversity of sources (Canadian natural resources is okay to cite however it would benefit the article to reinforce with other articles).
 * An example for a non government citation on Nunavut renewable energy is There are many others available on google scholar.
 * The original article also has some missing citations which could be added later such as "One of the most important uses for PV cells is in northern communities, many of which depend on high-cost diesel fuel to generate electricity. Since the 1970s, the federal government and industry have encouraged the development of solar technologies for these communities. Some of these efforts have focused on the use of hybrid systems that provide power 24 hours a day, using solar power when sunlight is available, in combination with another energy source." in Solar section

Suggestions for Improvement

Overall, the additions are heading in the right direction. I think you could make a great improvement to this article by continuing writing about each province that isn't currently well covered (Manitoba, BC, Saskatchewan). You would benefit from adding hyperlinks to your additions, they are a great tool for conveying your message while keeping your readers attention and increasing clarity.