User:Outdooradventurer22/Summer 1993/SpaceJam508 Peer Review

I think that there are few updates on the article. The article would definitely benefit from more information added to each section. I think having seen the film itself would help with a lot of information - kind of serve as a catalyst for each section. The lead section needs to be more engaging. It just jumps into a summary and then the plot. I think the article could use a stronger lead because that it what the reader sees first. It should include an intro to each section but not be overly detailed at the same time.

Specifically, the plot section would be a great place to start. Having seen the film, the plot will be easy to fill in and you can give your best rendition of the movie. You can use the presentation from class in order to harp on the important parts of the plot.

Regarding the tone of the article, so far it is good. It is important to keep the tone in mind when writing the remainder of the article because there will likely be a lot more info written. It can be hard to stay with a consistent tone at all times when writing a lot, so keep it in mind when constructing the rest of the article. I think at this stage there are sections underrepresented, but again, this will be addressed once the article gets formed more.

I think another key part that should be added are links. I think the page is lacking a lot of links whether it be names of people in the film or just relevant info that could use a link. That will help spice up the article a good bit.

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