User:Owen Gunderman/Willy Chavarria/Laptopenjoyer Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Owen Gunderman


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 * Draft


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 * Article

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LEAD

Straight-to-the-point, gives all points of profession as well as where he is based. Solid introduction.

CONTENT

Over all, content is good. You've got a good body of information on Chavarria so far. However, make sure to quote the person you got the quote in the third paragraph that you got the quote “from his casting to his designs, Mexican American designer Willy Chavarria has always knitted politics into fashion, and fought to see beauty where it is rarely recognized" from in the article itself as well.

TONE

It may be better to omit words such as "prestigious", "graceful and elegant" as it may indicate a bias towards the designer.

SOURCES

Maybe find citations for all the collaborations he's did? Over all you've got a solid body of sources you've referenced.

ORGANIZATION

I have no issues with the layout of the article; maybe if you find more information on his early life/background, making a section for that separate from his career.

OVERALL

Looking good so far; Chavarria sounds like he's made a lot of important strides with his work.