User:Owenpayne2000/African Americans in New York City/RSuee Peer Review

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 * User:Owenpayne2000/African Americans in New York City


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 * African Americans in New York City

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Content
I believe the topic of African Americans and the COVID-19 Pandemic will be a great addition to the page because it will provide up-to-date information about the main topic, "African Americans in New York City" and since the last topic placed in the Wiki page is from the "Great Depression and demographic shift", it will give the page a new topic of information. Of everything in the edit, there is one thing that I think is missing. The main topic of the page is that it is about African Americans in New York City, but there isn't any particular part where it mentions that the edit is specifically NYC or NY. In the beginning you mention that the Pandemic has affected African Americans inside the United States, maybe the addition of the data specifying NY would help after this statement. I think something along those lines should be added. This article is a great choice because it deals with one of Wikipedia's underrepresented topics of African Americans and past/current events.

Tone and Balance
The content provides is neutral content that doesn't show any signs of biases or leading towards a particular position. The content provides is very informative on the standings of African Americans during the COVID-19 Pandemic. In comparison to the main page, I believe the section to be very balanced to the other topics and it doesn't overwhelm the page with the one section.

Sources and References
A look into the sources shows that the fives sources provided are all reliable, approved secondary sources. All of the content written about are backed up by these sources. The sources provided are current given that the topic is current as well. Although the sources give information on the topic, I think a few sources on specifically NY would help for the overall reflection on the main page. One such source that I found is, [https://pdf.sciencedirectassets.com/271328/1-s2.0-S1047279720X00123/1-s2.0-S1047279720302933/main.pdf?X-Amz-Security-Token=IQoJb3JpZ2luX2VjEBAaCXVzLWVhc3QtMSJGMEQCIDhY96sFV%2BOCuheTtlea%2F7e51pc%2FsyCvZYy5Ak3P0xoOAiBZxSa3cKWcrcz2O9H0cCUQm9BJNWWr%2BwrWV4f%2BEdjtsSq0Awg5EAMaDDA1OTAwMzU0Njg2NSIMbBmWh7dviWceE%2Bd6KpEDmlI0T43Pzk%2FyJF4ATMrigtTXTXXtFLDLQrPVyi0OxLuSvYu0l%2BABTbOKoL8iGXOBLS%2BLW4oN3EoEuL27W3crUIsXiDqe%2BApaHzNEbfhCqJQteAaXkJ2uCy4VErgKJ5T6TwiDHNqLC86Dx4pdg37M4WQpD4MoCCqpuoKaVIlL2etGyqHanXiD4nEYG6DY1frkmVx6v1bLpVWCgThm8bBEK6AjQYDKkORTft1URDHSGwGofAz6VMI8OygoF2SCo58XjkW0Ye%2BRZhcGjjImrJ%2F%2BAfMKTA4QJxQoLO4fnmEynHt4GkjTsrBnwU81Wp0vHiod9AnBtI8IWrVHujWkZVueU3CUOGlQq%2FRT%2B07brFYNkR919lB7pDDNyUp9fTm%2BpfSRgNCVYSani98lCowyA3AiKMKhNHqHZCRrk712jeNq3tDc3urE%2BYO7BqYFPdu5YVPA%2BCyDlC8xhXRqAjvUxaLn7RfOVeJY32%2FsQunu%2Fg5Ad%2Fs2p3FgdMJTI3ZGQybKJ7MZ94gk7k12OTwxwoC5ps7nl5MwwtKVggY67AEhOXmd320EpddefeIpzfp9%2FDCJ0VsXIRNMeJryv6GPyT4aGeZ5DQ1vE%2FzWkFuw1tx3Z%2BUrpvVHNLjwPR7JSnICmkOGuxxV2KOlggTTNDdD8nif6xdwvtCvDX8AGq5pB2AN7U8V%2FWqNt5fdZTy4Lj%2BH9ah86h9hVBL6qksErfVHJ9dR5neyuNqzF5wuE1Aj92mEo3YG%2Fdj2wpU%2FD6PCDfjww6xb9BEd13aFJ34OznVZXiy9AT00bag1rJvViFenDdortjpWprUV%2F4nl4sTOKumkNfGbKVgn0892lWQ48T6dufIfyXBvw%2FdnqZXvUQ%3D%3D&X-Amz-Algorithm=AWS4-HMAC-SHA256&X-Amz-Date=20210308T010242Z&X-Amz-SignedHeaders=host&X-Amz-Expires=300&X-Amz-Credential=ASIAQ3PHCVTYVCNHVTMI%2F20210308%2Fus-east-1%2Fs3%2Faws4_request&X-Amz-Signature=45b4b1f118a521c1cab0fc60902348d7f6de470ea8e2704cd8a18a5b79f4af26&hash=f58326643504d074dd2f9732508b51321cb86c8b72c9dcc63e061efabfb7bf77&host=68042c943591013ac2b2430a89b270f6af2c76d8dfd086a07176afe7c76c2c61&pii=S1047279720302933&tid=spdf-0bfb925e-a52f-4700-8c26-4b3130688d26&sid=2297f4b294bd9346c99b0d912d3982d2a209gxrqa&type=client link], which gives a breakdown of the COVID-19 results in different zip codes throughout NYC for the Black/African American communities. Here is another, [https://pdf.sciencedirectassets.com/272375/1-s2.0-S0091743520X00107/1-s2.0-S0091743520303066/main.pdf?X-Amz-Security-Token=IQoJb3JpZ2luX2VjEBEaCXVzLWVhc3QtMSJGMEQCIFnGx8%2FkijZZQNM%2FKxfyEUYmQ1mKebZHH5f0yVCnLxRiAiB1AXyWcVlDGmnSDE1cv3IwXPonJSr3fuKAcRJB8hqL1yq0Awg5EAMaDDA1OTAwMzU0Njg2NSIMxftmDA7LRHKD%2Bk1iKpEDnNjuWTogglwFjn6%2F9PhqzLIJez0Dyo8Tqk3mS%2BkrNptUaF3PmtXRfLjVeJtP%2F37vWLZizA%2FExvs8FmT4z%2F4nFjA81Jy4p%2BBwWqTmeELKGFTqwMtMb6%2B6NUcn218vNW8uBKvMvWxiFXdcKklIvMFxISMADMt8ctFelNb9n7cnFW%2BrYbpCQN8MnRT%2FQUzh2mT%2BSrKyI9g3hJ45yeTSpRyP21Lo75aJhoje7DZbrAr3mGc2laeRpw5mVsGfBL4OEPjluVE6hHyEG33rbz80V3vE3%2Fe7k1Ujg6Zb5YmDTRU5Gm%2BoEBKGSzonpb5zt8NfhvsysGrk8QozddDY58XJhfPNA5V54urM%2BC4YwFeMCGAh6D%2BHvLDm5Nh%2BwCN5KWN8aQeCjOPQHDj5edOdN6o7MH0um%2Fkj8nSul2885TsAtuL93S93UmrWyn51glkF7zaEoalaagkrmkwYQka46eDs3bB3%2BIAAYfnwkoYhRl92bBmX7mwq4Owp3rV37ui1v0Qh7vzVYnvA3DY%2BbZvfpBYokNJNtRYwoNeVggY67AFN9jo%2BVTNqS75tim7ZVMsJ8F1ir7f413qSTXZfPRzKwaNH4qZ6402obUHK6K6R52LpXlYseeT6XfErhYNyFzk7x3FKpF2XQKbB%2FWK8U%2BzzqEDU98mrnVBIlUgokqHsTV9yFCaw%2Frnkv4RNU7BfRBchlqIXhEdBJQl0Kz9V%2BSyygOmmWYJ3tK5Bliini0%2FqSYYJ6%2F5UWQdDrZLoiDec3v5u61XC4VJEdAyV%2BkiK1qU55NSypCfe%2BxLVUhiwtypPQ7hS%2FEOFwx35UcCXhDjkAmGmpnASNsYPZnAwjdv%2BrnzMB%2BgTcQV4rTC5foyLmg%3D%3D&X-Amz-Algorithm=AWS4-HMAC-SHA256&X-Amz-Date=20210308T010100Z&X-Amz-SignedHeaders=host&X-Amz-Expires=299&X-Amz-Credential=ASIAQ3PHCVTYSODENZIZ%2F20210308%2Fus-east-1%2Fs3%2Faws4_request&X-Amz-Signature=c0c71bf804de4f12d08f6518f7e0f1cfe650f215cbc88dc2eb578a802b0d3cc5&hash=ad2a17948e621cde52f8927e1a850b4676408d304a114119cc2faf85d45be8fe&host=68042c943591013ac2b2430a89b270f6af2c76d8dfd086a07176afe7c76c2c61&pii=S0091743520303066&tid=spdf-6f51d34f-bfdc-4854-8825-e82d0f7fdddc&sid=2297f4b294bd9346c99b0d912d3982d2a209gxrqa&type=client link], that talks about the treatment disparities for PoC in NYC. The sources are over a good range of authors, including one by the National Urban League which states that they are a "historic civil rights and urban advocacy organization." This source is a great source to use to represent the marginalized nature of the topic. The links provided all work and the two without links give an easy way of finding them in databases.

Organization
The content provides is very clear and easy to read. It is very concise, going right to the point without drawing out the sentences. There are a few errors, which include the capitalization of "black" in specific places but nothing other than that. The section is very well organized and it does what it sets out to do.

Images and Media
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Overall Impressions
Overall, the content added improves the quality of the article that ends its information in the 1960s. The addition of the current pandemic information on African Americans brings the information into the 21st century and into current events. The article feels a lot more complete and well rounded. With the addition of specifying the effects within New York City or even just New York, it will help to round the information out and relate it back to the main topic at hand. One of the main strengths of this addition is that it is being added to an article that shows the overall struggle of African Americans in the US and NY. It is able to show the underrepresented population among Wikipedia and the US. It also (as a full article) allows the reader to form their own opinion on whether things have got better systematically for PoC. Another strength is the ability to inform its audience about the reasons that the COVID-19 pandemic has affected one part of the population more than the other. I think something that can be added (in the future if need be) to create a better overall page such as the start of the BLM movement in NYC and how that maybe has changed since the COVID pandemic. It would allow for a previous section (before COVID) so the transition isn't between 1960 to 2020-2021.