User:Ozayr2001/Eastern Yugur/Allisonpasechnick Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ozayr2001


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ozayr2001/Eastern Yugur
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eastern Yugur language

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really like how the draft changed the organization of the paragraphs. In the first line he brings the native region into it and I think that's important because when talking about a language, people want to know where it comes from. I think you could benefit by adding more information and examples of the language and how people might be familiar with it. I also think that this article would be more appealing with a picture of the land it comes from or the people who speak it themselves. This article hasn't been updated or much information hasn't been added but I think this article is headed on the right track to becoming as informative as possible.