User:P!neapp13/Jewish-American organized crime/34adel Peer Review

General info
Pineapp13
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PEER REVIEW 2 Pineapp13
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Jewish-American organized crime
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * REVIEW
 * Overall, Dana is in a good place/ has a good idea of what needs to be done. The biggest problem with the article is that it is a mix of information that is not organized with not much organization.  This will be Dana's main focus.  I think the ToC and restructured plan is much improved compared to the old one.  It helps to clean up information, but the one tip I will give is to avoid redundancy for the lack of information the article started with.  We also discussed how books were the main primary source for revisions, I think this will be helpful, but also some articles or newspapers of concrete events might be helpful.
 * The biggest point is the lack of information Dana is starting with. The article constantly circles back to repeat itself, and this will be Dana's biggest task of taking away the redundancy and trying to fill the void with limited information.  I also think that there is some unnecesary information, which Dana is also addressing, and there needs to be more information to fill that void.  It is difficult to go back to square one, but with this article Dana can successfully do so to improve and add to the original page.
 * The biggest point is the lack of information Dana is starting with. The article constantly circles back to repeat itself, and this will be Dana's biggest task of taking away the redundancy and trying to fill the void with limited information.  I also think that there is some unnecesary information, which Dana is also addressing, and there needs to be more information to fill that void.  It is difficult to go back to square one, but with this article Dana can successfully do so to improve and add to the original page.
 * The biggest point is the lack of information Dana is starting with. The article constantly circles back to repeat itself, and this will be Dana's biggest task of taking away the redundancy and trying to fill the void with limited information.  I also think that there is some unnecesary information, which Dana is also addressing, and there needs to be more information to fill that void.  It is difficult to go back to square one, but with this article Dana can successfully do so to improve and add to the original page.
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Updates
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Jewish-American organized crime

- Trying to find pictures and stronger sources

- Weird page trying to workout with technical errors

- Worried about overlooking small details

REVIEW

'''Since our last peer review, it is going well - narrowing down exactly what info is needed/ wanted. Dana is also looking for pictures to add to the article. The one problem is that the sources Dana will be using are referenced in the previous page, so Dana is worried this means there is not much to add - but I am sure it will be figured out. Again, it is mostly adding and reorganizing for this page. I think it will be a stronger piece and the work Dana has been putting in shows she is very interested in the topic.'''

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