User:P. Oncology/Jimmie C. Holland/MTFFTM Peer Review

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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Typically on wikipedia biographies, the lead/intro mentions something about their family/children and gives a general overview about who they are as a person before getting into their professional career stuff The career section feels like it moves too fast and runs off a list of everything she did. I think you should either narrow these down into bullet points like a timeline or describe the significance of some of the major events and try to make it sound more like you are telling her story rather than rattling off everything she’s done. There is no source for the part that says her books helped people cope with cancer. I think you should find secondary sources with testimonials or reviews that show how her book impacted people rather than telling.  For the accolades section, what did she do to earn these awards and how do they show how her work impacted the cancer world as a whole.   I like that your source is recent and it is very strong. I think you should find a few more.

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