User:PGupta0604/American Association of Physicians of Indian Origin/Apple063 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PGupta0604


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PGupta0604/American_Association_of_Physicians_of_Indian_Origin?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * American Association of Physicians of Indian Origin

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft’s strengths include its relevance and its clear and easy-to-understand ideas.

It addresses an equity gap on Wikipedia, uplifting the voices of a marginalized group, American-Indian medical students and physicians, by explaining how an organization (AAPI) sought to address the discrimination they faced. More information could be added to highlight the viewpoints of this group, such as reports on the acts of discrimination and barriers they met.

To improve the draft, I might remove the line about immigrants from countries other than India because it seems off-topic.

I would also suggest including information about where this contribution will be included in the original article, along with adding a lead section that makes the intent of this contribution clearer to readers. Additionally, the author should include references so that readers can ensure that the information in the contribution can be confirmed to be accurate, unbiased, and, overall, reliable.