User:PMLopera/Manuela Sáenz/Alexisbums Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PMLopera


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PMLopera/Manuela_S%C3%A1enz?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Manuela Sáenz

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello there, hope all is well. I have read your contributions to this article and would like to share some thoughts regarding your additions.

Below is a list of suggestions I have for your article,


 * 1) "This patriotism was noticed in her sympathy for the creole uprising against Spanish." - You are missing some information here, patriotism for what?, Perhaps change "sympathy" to "sympathies", add "The" in front of spanish, as you are talking about the Country rather than the language.
 * 2) "where she would pass information as a spy" - this claim is not backed, add citation after sentence. Who was she spying for, and what was she spying on?
 * 3) "Manuela Saenz participated in the negotiations with the Numancia battalion" - you should preface what that is, where, with who and when.
 * 4) "Rocafuerte justified his order to exile Sáenz by stating “It is the women who most promote the spirit of anarchy in these countries"." This is a good addition. a next step would be adding sublinks to Rocafuerte's Wikipedia. This is a general statement that should be used where necessary throughout.
 * 5) "Nella Martinez encouraged the recognition of Manuela Saenz and paid homage to her by organizing a gathering of feminists in Paita on September 24, 1989." - this sentence may function better if you mention why Nella Martinez is important. We do not know who she is... perhaps reorganize to say that there was a gathering of feminists... organized by Nella Martinez, who is known for...
 * 6) The citing looks good overall, They are all accessible links and would be considered credible for Wikipedia.
 * 7) Your additions under feminism add context to the work and you are able to find an appropriate balance of feminist information without throwing opinions or unstated claims.

Overall, you have successfully added information to this wikipedia page. Although there is already quite a lot on the Wikipedia page, I hope that you are able to find a little bit more to add to your contribution. I would now focus on the language and structure of your article and how it should fit into the overall Wikipedia Article.

Good Luck on your next draft!

- Alexis