User:PacCore1/Central Valley groundwater pollution/C nguyen143 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PacCore1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PacCore1/Central_Valley_groundwater_pollution?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Central Valley groundwater pollution

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added by my peer.

Yes it does include an introductory sentence that clearly describes the article's topic.

There is a brief description of the topics that are going to be discussed down below.

It talks about the central valley being a major dairy producer in the country but does not elaborate more in the subheadings of the article.

I think it is overly detailed because most of the information that is provided could be utilized on the lower portions of the article.

Content

Yes the information added to the article is relevant to the topic and up to date.

There could always be content added since it is talking about the groundwater pollution in the Central Valley which could always change every year, but there is nothing that does not belong there.

Tone and Balance

The information that will be added to the article will be very neutral since it is just stating facts about the San Joaquin River. It is not using any heavy words that will persuade the reader to think differently or gather a biased opinion on.

Sources and References

Yes the sources that are used do work and are reliable to the information that is provided in the sandbox. All of the information is sourced from 2022, so it is very up to date. The authors that wrote the information that help update this wikipedia website are credible.

Organization

The information is very easy to read as it does not add extra fluff and gets directly to the point of the article. There are no spelling errors when I read it.