User:Packarec3037/Motor vehicle emissions and pregnancy/Anamhye Peer Review

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Packarec3037/Motor vehicle emissions and pregnancy
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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Packarec3037/Motor_vehicle_emissions_and_pregnancy?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Motor vehicle emissions and pregnancy

Evaluate the drafted changes
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First of all, good job writing your first draft! These are good topics, and the resources are well-suited to each section of the draft. My group and I enjoyed reading them. Attached is our constructive criticism and areas for improvement to enhance your Wikipedia project.

Constructive Criticism:

Title: We suggest changing the title to "Effects of Motor Vehicle Emissions on Pregnant Women and Children" to reflect the broader scope of the article. This will encompass not only the impact on pregnant women but also the effects on children living near highways and the long-term consequences of these emissions as they grow up.

Areas of Improvement:


 * Population Characteristics: The current section focuses on one specific area and lacks valid sources. It would be beneficial to replace this section with more comprehensive and diverse studies that examine the effects of nitrogen dioxide on fetuses across different regions and populations.
 * Low Birth Weight (LBW) and Preterm Delivery: The article mentions that air pollution can cause lower birth weights, insufficient development of the immune system and organs, and premature births. It would be helpful to provide specific studies or research findings that support these claims, along with the magnitude of the effects observed.
 * Asthma: The section briefly mentions the impact of asthma on children exposed to air pollution but lacks specific evidence or studies to support the claims made. It would be beneficial to include relevant research findings that demonstrate the association between motor vehicle emissions and asthma in children.
 * Respiratory Problems: The article mentions that children exposed to higher levels of car pollutants experience respiratory problems, including wheezing, ear and throat infections, and bronchiolitis. It would be helpful to provide specific studies or research findings that support these claims and quantify the increased incidence of respiratory issues associated with motor vehicle emissions.
 * Epidemiology: The section briefly discusses motor vehicle emissions as a global issue and mentions the regulations in different countries. However, it would be beneficial to provide more specific information about the impact of these regulations on reducing air pollution-related health issues in children and pregnant women, along with relevant studies or data to support these claims.

In summary, it is recommended to provide more specific evidence from valid sources, include diverse studies from different regions and populations, and ensure that the information presented is supported by reliable research findings.