User:Packarec3037/Motor vehicle emissions and pregnancy/Whitea23 Peer Review

General info
Packarec3037
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to the draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Packarec3037/Motor_vehicle_emissions_and_pregnancy?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://wiki.alquds.edu/?query=Motor_vehicle_emissions_and_pregnancy#:~:text=In%20Los%20Angeles%20County%2C%20researchers%20found%20a%20higher,than%20for%20people%20living%201000%C2%A0ft%20from%20the%20freeways.

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hello, I have read your draft and there are a few things I would suggest. First I would suggest drafting up a more detailed lead that helps the reader understand what major points will be talked about. You have good information on the population characteristics. I see you have some current sources ranging from 2010 to 2023 which is good. I would suggest developing a brief introduction sentence rather than jumping directly into the stats. I would suggest talking more about the USEPA since there is no other mention of it in the original wiki article, in order to develop a better understanding of them and their role. Explain why the European Union and Japan have strict regulations. Also, in order to create balance, are there any findings that suggest there is no significant linkage between motor emissions and pregnancy? Discuss more on findings across different locations so that there is a wide variety/diversity. Overall, you have some good information, just start to develop more around the current topics you have and reiterate some points so there is clear reasoning and explanations. Then, try and develop a concluding statement that could mention any ongoing research there or any future implications for the epidemiology of your topic. There are a few minor grammatical errors. Take a look at the wording, it may help to read it out loud and see how it sounds. Seeing as the original article does not have an epidemiology section, your additions should improve the article.