User:Paigeerickson009

About Me
Thank you for visiting my user page. My name is Paige Erickson, I am a Junior at Snohomish High school. This is my first year enrolled in E.V.C.C. I am a very active individual, I love to play soccer, tennis and ski. My hobbies are art, and I love partaking in spike ball. Netflix is my go-to activity when I have nothing else to do, but when I am not watching shows, I enjoy spending time with friends.

My Wikipedia Interests
As a student I will use Wikipedia to my advantage, using it to learn about things, in particular things related to English. This website will allow me to embrace my learning and take it to another level. Using Wikipedia will be giving me opportunities to read other students, professors: etc. words, and use them to enlighten my own passage ways. As a volunteer on this website I hope to challenge myself and others on making their articles grammatically correct. According to www.Definitions.net, "Wikipedia" means "A source of abundant encyclopedic knowledge", this means that the there is a large amount of research on this site that is in our hands.

Article Evaluation
LANY, to many people those letters represent places, "Las Angeles, New York", but to me those letters represent a band of three young man. Their music is one that I always have on full blast in my car, screaming out pf the car windows. My interest in this band started in 2019, with their song "ILYSB", I went to the concerts, bought merch, I was a true fan girl. Paul Jason Klein the main singer of the group added on to my increasing love for this alternative rock band. I visited the "LANY" article on Wikipedia and found three aspects that I found worth commenting on to begin with the structure of the article, the research and quotations, and finally the grammar.

To begin with this articles structure really stood out to me. I noticed a lack of thoughtfulness put into this article. Their are two main parts the beginning of the band, and some information about their music debut. This article begins with the right idea brining in an introduction of the band, "2014-2017; Musical Beginnings of Lany", but following it multiple paragraphs could have followed with much information about the artists, their pasts, how they found each other, etc. The lack of structure is very obvious to the reader, and the article itself acts as a scattered article. We see strong viewpoints on who this band has interacted with over the years, festivals they have performed at, but where is the origin of the band itself? The following paragraphs are solely about 3 of the bands songs. The one things that is missing from this article is the idea of the structure, where is the background information?

Secondly, while reading this article it made me question where the writer got their information from. There is many quotes that seem to come straight from a band member, but their is no information following of who stated the facts. There is one properly cited quote from the main singer explaining where their name originated from, but we see a lack of where this writer got his other information. Other quotes are just thrown around trying to "state a fact". In the last paragraph "2021:Mama's Boy", it expresses a feeling of how one of the artists wanted to express through his music, the question that remains is who spoke this quote? There is many other artists and singers mentioned in this article, but there is no definition of how they relate to the band LANY itself.

Lastly in this article "LANY", I do commend the writer on the grammar. For the most part everything was written correctly, and even though a lack of depth was missing few mistakes were found. I think what could've helped this article tremendously, would be not cutting the sentences so short, many had opportunities to be added on to, for example "LANY announced their second album, Malibu Nights, on March 8, 2018", what was the inspiration for there album?. The sentences tend to be very short and cut off, and the lack of commas are also noticeable through the article. Another minor correction that I noticed, was dates. None of them had a year. Also the dates looked like "March 3", to properly write the dates would be "March 3rd".

Therefore, the article "LANY" had the right idea but there was a lot of parts in the article that could be corrected. Visiting this article on Wikipedia, the three aspects that need to be worked on was the structure, the research and quotations, and lastly the grammar. LANY will always be my favorite band, their alternative rock music truly speaks to a persons heart.