User:Paigelebs/California Fur Rush/AbbieAver Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Paigelebs


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Paigelebs/California_Fur_Rush?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * California Fur Rush
 * California Fur Rush

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think this is a good starting point but there are a few things that I wish had more information.

I think you should talk about how the US government managed sea otters more. What did their involvement look like? Was this done through laws, hunting restrictions, re-introduction activities? You could also mention current practices to restore populations and contrast these methods with the methods in the 19th century.

I really liked the pictures you added! Those were helpful to the context of the article and made it more enjoyable to read.

The sentence starting with "The US Geological Survey" was slightly confusing to me. I think if you changed the wording from "sea otter population counts" to "sea otter population numbers" this might make more sense the first time the sentence is read. I think you could add information about what the other successful sea otter population trends are. You might try to find sources that talk about the current sea otter population and compare those to the 1991 findings to show the incline or decline occurring right now.

Overall, I think this is a good start! All of your information is relevant, neutral and supported by your sources.The only other things I would suggest adding are maybe brief information about how the other animals listed in the lead paragraph were effected? The article focuses mostly on the sea otter and doesn't discuss the other animals again. If the other animals are not discussed it could seem like the sea otter is over-represented in the article.