User:Paigelebs/California Fur Rush/Elijah Whalen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Paigelebs


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Paigelebs/California Fur Rush


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * California Fur Rush

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the sources you're adding, they're all professional/academic and neutral in tone. Not to mention, I think that your tone in the information that you drafted has a neutral tone as well, which is very important. Additionally, I love the pictures! I think that you added some images that add some visuals to the topics being discussed (such as the Russian-American fort, which was a very nice touch).

I wondered if you could add additional information about some of the other species of furbearers mentioned in the lead paragraph, and how they're faring in the modern day. Beavers and Sea Otters are explored well, but maybe some surveys about Northern Fur Seals (I found a NOAA analysis here: https://www.fisheries.noaa.gov/species/northern-fur-seal), Mink, Weasels, etc. could allow for a more holistic analysis and not lean so heavily on beavers and sea otters.

Another idea which I think isn't necessary, but that you could consider is updating the lead paragraph. The peer review guidelines mention updating the lead paragraph to include new reflected information, which I think could be warranted here. Maybe just a sentence at the end which talks about how the California Fur Rush affected the conservation of these animals. Again, definitely not a necessity, but certainly could be helpful.

Overall, I love what you've added so far, and my main analysis is simply to add more information, and do more of what you've already done, as it's great work, and it will help improve the article.