User:Palpatine824/Totem/LimeGreenGiraffe Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Palpatine824


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Palpatine824/Totem


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Totem

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead has been updated to have new content added by my peer, Palpatine824. The Lead does have a good introductory sentence that describes that article's topic. The topic is totem, and the introductory sentence pretty much sums up all the information needed to know before continuing to read the rest of the article. The Lead also covers a brief description of the article's major sections including, the term's importance, the Ojibwe people, and the cultural significance of the term. The Lead has some information about how the term totem came to mean what it does that isn’t touched on again in the rest of the article. I think Palpatine824 had a very concise Lead that was not overly detailed and was well edited. There was only the Lead for me to review, but I think it’s a great start to this edit. The only thing that I would change is the readability of a couple of long sentences.