User:Pamgorilla/Deaf life in the Philippines/Toriracz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pamgorilla


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Deafness in the Philippines


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deafness in the Philippines

Content

 * The content of this article is overall very relevant to the topic, each section stays on topic nicely.
 * Most of the content is up to date, but I would try if possible to drive deeper into trying to find more current facts within past couple of years.
 * The strongest section was "Human and Civil Rights" section, although there is so much content missing from other sections discussed in class. I would work on trying to add more information in new sections such as "Language Depravation".

Tone and Balance

 * I think the ton of the article overall is very neutral. Great job!

Sources and References

 * I think you have a great variety of sources, although you could expand a little more. I would try using the recent search strategies we have learned to get more information. I do think you can also get information from sources that you already have!

Organization

 * I think the layout of the overall article is good, but in the "Major Organizations" section I personally would name it something different. ( ex: Deaf-led Organizations)

New Articles

 * You are following Wikipedia's Notability requirements with sources. Great Job!
 * Expanding on research (sources!) and adding more content (major topics discussed in class ex: Language Depravation).
 * I love how you linked other Wikipedia sources within your article!

Overall Impressions

 * I think there is still more content to be added to this but what you have done so far, if you are stuck I would definitely refer back to you "Human Civil Rights" section. That was very well written.
 * The strengths that are in this article so far is that the details added so far, and the overall tone of the article.
 * Keep up the good work! But this article has a lot of potential, add more details and find more sources (if possible recent!)