User:Panchovillastan/Navy Petty-Officers School/Dancer2025!! Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Panchovillastan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Panchovillastan/Navy_Petty-Officers_School?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Navy Petty-Officers School

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

You didn't really do much to the lead but you didn't really need to because the lead looks pretty detailed and gives a lot of details.

Content

The content you added was very descriptive and detailed. I thought that it added a lot of value to the article and did a good job to make the picture of what happened come into view much more clearer. I particularly thought it was important that you added the part about how women were tortured in different ways.

Guiding questions

The way you describe the details and the things that transcribed was done in a neutral way. You do not interject your own opinions into the post but just describe the facts.

You didn't add any new images but I might recommend that you try to find images of the people and victims that you mentioned.

Your sources look really good.

Organization

The article is easy read but I would double check some of the grammar in a few places.

The images also add a lot of value.

Overall impressions

I thought you did a great job but, a few things I would add would be add pictures of some of the victims you mentioned and add a link to the Wikipedia page about the trials of the people in charge of the school.