User:Panswiki/Holy of Holies/Jvallentine1211 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Panswiki
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Panswiki/Holy of Holies

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Not Applicable
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Not Applicable
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Not Applicable
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Not Applicable
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Not Applicable

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?          Yes, the content being added is an update to the Holy of Holies page with information regarding Seventh Day Adventists.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?        Sources are a little bit on the older side, but the information appears to be current.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?      No.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?        Most of the content is neutral, but there is a source directly from the SDA website.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?     The aforementioned SDA source could contain bias toward a particular SDA view of the Holy of Holies.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?      No, the addendum to article is about SDA view of the Holy of Holies, so it represents only those views.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?      No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?       Two of the Three sources are from secondary sources, the third is the SDA article about the Holy of Holies, which could offer a biased, primary perspective.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?        Yes.
 * Are the sources current?          The secondary sources are from the Nineties, though I do not see an issue with this as we are dealing with a rather ancient concept in the Holy of Holies.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?        Yes!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?      Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?      The only issue I see stylistically is the way "The Seventh Day Adventism believes" reads. I'd try removing "The" in both instances, which should improve the flow of the article.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?    Yes.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media       Panswiki did not add any images or media.


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?       Yes, the Holy of Holies article contained no information on SDA views of the Holy of Holies.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?      It contains good information on the SDA view of the Holy of Holies and is well written.
 * How can the content added be improved?        Try to find a non-primary source that can attest to the same things as the primary source, if possible!