User:Papilio Charontis/Internment of Japanese Americans/Jordanshie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Papilio Charontis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Papilio%20Charontis/Internment_of_Japanese_Americans?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Internment of Japanese Americans

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

In response to your proposed section on Tule, I believe it is a good idea. There is a lot of potential for information on its significance. To justify its inclusion, you could mention it has the larges population in the table shown.

You could also choose to add more sources. A larger bibliography with multiple sources could lead to a more balanced review.

I think you have good ideas that just need to be further developed on the wiki page, good job!