User:Paragonicus/Battle of Mantinea (362 BC)/PastaRL Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?  (Paragonicus)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Paragonicus/Battle of Mantinea (362 BC)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Battle of Mantinea (418 BC)

Evaluate the drafted changes
 Lead 

Added a lot of good additional context in the background of the Battle of Mantinae, as well as properly naming key figures involved in the context that were lacking in the original Wiki page and their actions (Artaxerxes II, Epiminondas...) The original article leaves out much of the background and important historical context you provide (as well as key figures, etc...)

 Structure 

You imporved te structure alot comared to the original article, providing a more structured series of events (The Initial Skirmish, Main Action, etc...) wich is important in helping a reader to understand the series of events that were undertaken during the battle and having the context of said actions, something immensely important in understanding any battle/conflict. Perhaps provide more context in the Aftermath of the battle.

 Tone and Balance 

The series of events described very clearly outline how the battle was fought in a well structured manner, you provided a great deal of unbiased information regarding all involved parties and their actions, and expanded on previously unmentioned/not as well documented parties (Such as the Persian diplomatic intervention led by Artaxerxes II)

 Images and Media 

The original article lacked media, you did a great job in finding images showcasing specific individuals and the scope/series of events of the battle. Perhaps find more images regarding other important figures of the battle? (Spartan King Agesilaus II, mainly)

 Sources 

You provided many more sources than found in the original article, amazing job there!