User:Parisgap/Laurene Simms/Cmcgilpin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Parisgap)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Parisgap/Laurene_Simms?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Add more on Early Life's section
 * Add more on Personal's section.
 * Not enough of information on each section. Need to add more!
 * Don't forget to add work cited!
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Parisgap/Laurene_Simms?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)