User:Parisgap/Laurene Simms/Dnh22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Parisgap) (Klowe7) (Qal19999)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Laurene Simms


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No current version exists

Evaluate the drafted changes
The intro section is great, concise and all the relevant info about what the article contains.

Early life section is good, relevant due to her deafness occurring then.

Under Education, where did she receive her PhD? That is not clear from the sentence, I don't think.

I think under career, if you're going to mention she is on several boards it would be worth noting which ones.

Personal life may not be as relevant to the article, I think it could be deleted at no huge loss.

Advocacy and Leadership is the best section in the article. Great information and sources.

Documentary section is good. Should there be a citation in the first paragraph? It seems like one might be missing after the list of participants.

Overall an excellent article with great information! I think there are a few things that do not contribute to the reason someone would come to said article (her personal life section) and could be removed at no real loss. I am excited to see where this article ends up!! Great work guys!

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