User:Parisgap/Laurene Simms/Hayleydt Peer Review

General info

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Parisgap


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 * User:Parisgap/Laurene Simms


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * The information in the lead gives a brief introduction to who Laurene Simms is as a person and is not overtly detailed.
 * It could use more information about the other content in the article, such as a brief acknowledgement of her accomplishments.

Content


 * Content within the article is very relevant to the topic!
 * It could use more information on her Early Life and Personal Life.
 * If the information is lacking, maybe combine the two sections? Or also combine it into the Education section?
 * The Advocacy and Leadership section is very informative and detailed!

Tone and Balance


 * Article holds a neutral tone!
 * No ideas are unevenly balanced

Sources and References


 * Sources look like they come from reliable places!
 * Interviews with Laurene Simms are a great resource for information.

Organization


 * Article is well written, easy to understand, and organized clearly.
 * In Documentary | Climbing the Avalanche (2018) section, the last sentence of the first paragraph has a list of names that starts with a parenthesis, but there is no end parenthesis. The list of names might be incomplete or it was just overlooked.

Images and Media


 * It might be beneficial to add pictures of Laurene Simms once the article is completed.

For New Articles


 * Great use of linking to existing articles to allow for its discovery once it is completed!
 * Could benefit from some more secondary sources to support some of the information

Overall Impressions


 * This is a well researched article and would benefit from some additional information in some sections or the consolidation of those section.
 * Great use of sources; could use some more secondary, but existing sources are reliable!
 * Images would be great in a biographical article.