User:Parkerpons/Abnormality (behavior)/Roggemaj Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Parkerpons


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Abnormality (behavior)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Parker. I could not gain access to your draft in your sandbox for some technical reason so i evaluated the original article. For the lead section i thought the information was very well cited. There does need to be some restructuring for better flow. There were a couple sentences that needed fixing such as this one that starts of with "It is important to note is that abnormal behavior".

The structure of the entire article needs work as there was no clear structure. There was already good information but I think just organizing everything would help the article greatly.

The past authors did a good job in covering the criterion for abnormal behavior but it think overall it could be expanded to cover other subjects directly related to these behaviors such as prevalence rates if available.

This article was flagged for having a non neutral point of view and i think it relates to the specific examples within the presented criteria. I think these examples could be reworded and some need citations, this could make it be more of a neutral view.

Overall the sources were strong and non biased. the article could use more sources though if you expand on other things.