User:Partysnaax15/The Elder Scrolls V: Skyrim – Hearthfire/TheCrystalHermitCrab Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PartySnaax15


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * The Elder Scrolls V: Skyrim – Hearthfire


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Elder Scrolls V: Skyrim – Hearthfire

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

To began this peer review, I'll began with your starting sentence. Although good you start to tell about the game, it seemed too rushed into the subject. Starting to read it, I was confused. I wasn't sure if it was a board game, app etc. Try and give more background information about what Skyrim is, and then go into what the add on, the elder scrolls, is about.

Secondly, I would recommend more sources for your starting. Although there are sources throughout the rest, the whole first section does not have any. There are many facts in there that can be fact checked and verified.

Lastly, the organization can be fixed a bit. Move all passages about what the game is about, making of the game and any "History" of the game towards the beginning to give viewers more of an idea what the game is, then other information below.

This article through out is very well written and has a bunch of information and research put into it. The body section all have their sources next to them and are also easy to find iin the sources section. This article was an easy read and very clear with its information. With some small fixes it will be great!