User:Pasillas21/Akaka Falls State Park/HMartinez25 Peer Review

General info
Pasillas21
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pasillas21/Akaka Falls State Park
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * ʻAkaka Falls State Park:

Evaluate the drafted changes
HMartinez25 Peer review

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

'''I noticed that there were no changes to the Lead, if you plan to make any edits to this section for article Akaka Falls State Park. I would probably make note of it in your sandbox.'''

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

'''The content that you added is great for the article, as someone asked a question in the talk page about special things to do at the park. You not only answer their question, but give them detailed notes about what is and isn't allowed at Akaka Falls State Park. The information you added does a great job at letting readers know what they have available around them when they visit Akaka Falls State Park.'''


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

The information that you added is up to date, great job!


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

'''I was able to checkout the reference that you provided in the Sandbox. There might be other things you can add for the Prohibited section that you are trying to add to this article. Following the link you gave, and clicking on the header that says "Rules," on the hawaii.gov page you are able to scroll down and see all the other things that are prohibited in the parks.'''


 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

'''The article does not deal with Wikipedia's equity gap, but it does address some figures that are a part of the Native people of Hawaii. Such as Chief 'Akaka-o-ka-nī'au-oi'o-i-ka-wao, although you did not write about these figures in your sandbox. Do you think it is a route that you want to take, perhaps adding more information about these figures that are in relation to ʻAkaka Falls State Park? It is just a thought, nothing that you have to take action on.'''

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral?

The content that you added is concise and neutral, good job!


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

'''The information that you added is straightforward, it's informative to the reader. It deals with regulations of the park, facilities available, common activities, and some additional information that the website gives about ʻAkaka Falls State Park. None of the information added in the sandbox shows a hint of emotion behind it.'''


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

'''I wouldn't say that there are viewpoints that are effected by the information that you are trying to contribute to the article. But out of all the sections you added "Activities," has the least options. That might be intentional or unintentional, perhaps that's really all you can do at the ʻAkaka Falls State Park. If by chance you find more activities that you can do at the park, I would add them so that there is a bit more balance in that section, compared to the other sections.'''


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

'''The content does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another. Good job at achieving this!'''

Sources and References

 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

'''Yes, all the new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information. As the article linked is attributed to hawaii.gov, which partners with the Department of Land and Natural Resources, and stateparks.org (America's State Parks).'''


 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)

'''Yes the content is quite literally the same, as what is mentioned in the source. You can't really summarize these points much further as they are as concise as they can be. If you really wanted to, you could describe what they mentioned in the ʻAkaka Falls State Park page, instead of using bullet points.'''


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

'''The sources are as thorough as they can be. Do you plan to add other sections besides what you have so far? I see they have the information for the Entrance Fee, but that would probably feel as though we are trying to sway their attention to come visit the park.'''


 * Are the sources current?

The source is as up to date as you can be, the last update on the page was 4/16/24.


 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?

'''The source is copyrighted by the State of Hawaii, so I would say that the source is written by a diverse spectrum of authors. You don't necessarily include historically marginalized individuals but it can be assumed that yes.'''


 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)

'''This is definitely up there when it comes to sources, as it is approved by the Division of State Parks, Hawaii, and America's State Parks. It's giving you the best information when it comes to ʻAkaka Falls State Park and you're visiting.'''


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

'''You're link works perfectly fine! Good job!'''

Organization
'''Your content added is concise, clear, and easy to read. Really straightforward and well written!''' There are no grammatical/spelling errors for the content that you wrote in the sandbox. '''The content added is well organized, broken up in parts: activities, facilities, prohibited, and additional information. They all contribute to the topic and it's major points because they give readers' insight about important information when and if they visit ʻAkaka Falls State Park.'''
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media
'''I saw that you have no images and media at the moment, do you intend to keep it that way or do you plan to add some as time goes on? Perhaps images of different facilities that are at ʻAkaka Falls State Park or some scenic viewpoints would be nice to display if you go about bringing images and media into your content. Just remember about the different types of copyright allowed in Wikipedia, and that you first have to bring in the images/media through Wikipedia's sister website MediaWiki before bringing them in Wikipedia.'''

Overall impressions
'''I would say that the content you added to "ʻAkaka Falls State Park" article makes the article feel a bit more complete. Just because the article was already a bit empty to begin with, that being it's about a location and there wasn't too much information about it. When it comes to State Parks, there are regulations. So the content you bring, really ties in things together and also answers someone from the talk page.''' '''That the content is concise, clear, and easy to read. It's organized well, broken up into pieces that make it flow nicely.''' Perhaps seeing some images in your edit can make things a bit more lively, just because your content added really touches on the visitation of ʻAkaka Falls State Park.
 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?