User:Paslaskip1/Wordle/Aqp24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Paslaskip1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Paslaskip1/Wordle?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wordle
 * Wordle

Evaluated by Aqp24- Anh Pham
Before beginning my peer review, I want to acknowledge how cool it is that you deviated from the list of articles provided in class and chose to work on an article topic that both is associated with writing and language as well as has relevance to contemporary culture! In examining your sandbox draft in comparison to the existing article, I also understand that you are working on adding a health benefits section in order to enhance the article.

Content : In regard to content, the article makes mention of a number of different ways Wordle can better one's health, such as "improving reasoning skills, strategy, and creativity" as well as reducing dementia and stress and increasing self-esteem and social connections. The article thus performs a comprehensive treatment of the health benefits available, which definitely adds to the body of knowledge about the game. However, the wording of such benefits could be a little more specific in order to increase clarity of meaning. One big thing that I saw was the repetition of "health benefits" all throughout the article; the kind of health that Wordle assists in bettering could be identified, whether that be mental, physical, cognitive, etc. Likewise, in the line, "They encourage parents to not directly help their children solve the wordle, making the children learn and help themselves," how does Wordle in fact "[make] the children learn and help themselves?" I could see here some references to the field of psychology being made in order to stray away from broad generalizations. The same can be said about the phrase "Wordle can have long-lasting effects...". Discussing what particular effects-- examples being cognitive, social, psychological etc.-- would be beneficial here for increasing clarity.

Tone: In regard to tone, segments of the article possess casual language, which would most likely not align with Wikipedia's guidelines. The line "aging decreases the likelihood that we can solve problems and think on our toes" uses the first-person "we" and the idiom "think on our toes"-- two linguistic elements that I do not think are found within Wikipedia. In addition, there are also moments where the article errs on promoting one viewpoint. This is especially evident in the positive adjective used to define some terms such as "great, fun, and stimulating" for games as well as "effective way" to describe Wordle. I would recommend revising to be more objective and informative! Likewise, to add another point of view into the mix, perhaps create a section that discusses the negative consequences of Wordle to one's health. From the top of my head, this could be approached through the lens of addiction.

Structure : In regard to the structure of the article, I detected three sections: one about children, elderly individuals, and Wordle as a video game. This section in the article to me is sensibly organized; however, an alternative way to organize it that could be worth some consideration is by health benefit-- the mental, physical, social, etc! In my article on life writing, I also make reference to how autobiographically-inflected writing helps to reduce dementia as well :)

Sources: Some of the sources appear to be reliable in the sense that they are peer-reviewed and scholarly. However, I do notice that some information seems to appear from magazines, which are not as reliable. I do understand, though, that since Wordle is a newer word game, there may not be as many scholarly sources out there to use!