User:Passionforbaking/Learning through play/IntlEd Matt Peer Review

General info
Passionforbaking
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Passionforbaking/Learning through play
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Learning through play

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content

The content added to the definitions of work and play fits with the article's topic and presents information about a new program that promotes learning through play. This information is also supported by a citation from 2003, which adds credibility to the information.

Tone and Balance

I wonder if the content added around the enriched curriculum could be edited to be more neutral. The information presented highlights only the positive aspects of the program and does not mention any potential drawbacks or contrasting views of the program. Changing how this information is presented would address this and ensure the neutrality of the statement.

Sources and References

The sections focusing on the different types of play in child development are supported by at least one citation. These citations are all taken from research and articles published after 2000, providing recent information to support these points. When checking the different links in the references, all worked and went directly to the articles cited, apart from one. When I tried to access the link for reference 4 (Newbury, K.,Wooldridge, D.,Peet, S.&Bertelsen, C.(2015)) this link would not open and may need to be checked. The work that has been cited is not only recent but incorporates work from various authors, showing that a depth of research has been undertaken to find appropriate sources for the article.

Organization

Several edits in the section “Knowledge acquisition” address grammatical errors in the original article. These edits improve the quality of the article and show that the author has taken time to review the different sections. Where the author has added new content, such as in the “Benefits of Different Types of Play in Child Development” section, the information is well organized and presented in a manner that is easy to follow but concise and to the point.