User:Passionforbaking/Learning through play/Slk333 Peer Review

General info
User: Passionforbaking
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Passionforbaking/Learning through play:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Learning through play:

Lead
''It does not appear you have made any edits to the lead of the article, or not yet. However, you reference an "enriched curriculum", but as a reader, I am unsure what you are referring to and where this connects to the topic of the article. Perhaps "enriched curriculum" can be reworded? The content of that paragraph is valuable.''

''The pre-existing lead includes a brief description of the article's major sections. If you are going to add sections to the article, I recommend working those into that portion of the lead, as well. It is very concise right now, but there is room for new information.''

Content
''It appears you plan to add a section on Benefits of Different Types of Play in Child Development. You have cited your information appropriately and offer new information that is valuable to the topic. However, in the "Free Play" portion, you say "Some research emphasizes....". I would recommend removing this and specifically stating where this research comes from and how it supports the topic of the article. I also think there is room to add more information and examples as to how these types of play benefit learners.''

I also recommend adding content that addresses historically underrepresented populations related to Learning Through Play.

Tone and Balance
''The viewpoints in the article are relatively balanced. You do mention "forty years of research have shown a positive correlation between play and children's learning". However, I am wondering where this span of research comes from, as your source is dated from 2013.''

Sources and References
''All of your sources are relatively recent, with the oldest being from 2003. With all the information you are considering adding to the article, you have backed it up with at least one source. Your sources appear to be reputable.''

Organization
''Your content is well-written, and it appears you have already caught multiple grammatical errors on the original article. As the original article is quite long, I am curious what you are planning to add besides the benefits of learning through play, and what you may also plan on removing.''

''I also noticed that you have reorganized the seven characteristics of play into bullets. Perhaps adding examples next to each bullet would be valuable for readers.''

Images and Media
It does not appear you plan on adding any images to the article, although images may be valuable to the topic.