User:Pat Miner23/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Reg Revans

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose Reg Revans because he was a catalyst and a huge part in the movement of action learning, was a management consultant, and also represented Britain in the 1928 Summer Olympics. Action learning is a process of insightful questioning and reflective listening. Reg wrote books about this and has paved the way for management education or organizational development. His ideas are easy to understand for everyone which is why his philosophies were so accepted. My preliminary impression of this article was that it was unfinished. I feel like there were points in the story, especially talking about his early life, that can be expanded on. Action learning is used every day by tons of people and Reg Revans needs to be recognized for this.

Evaluate the article
In this article, the introduction paragraph gives a very shallow level of knowledge on who he is, which is technically what an introduction is supposed to do, but it feels like some things are missing. Two out of three sentences in the introduction paragraph are about his participation in the Olympic Games which doesn't really describe what is in the full articles major sections.

Moving on to the content section, I think it covers pretty much everything that needs to be said about Revans, it talks about his books, describes action learning, and gives a nice finishing touch by adding the legacy tab to talk about how much he impacted people around the world. I think the section about his success in Belgium can be expanded to all of his success, or there should be an added section about his olympic time since it is talked about so much in the lead paragraph.

The tone of the article comes across as very neutral and makes it readable for everyone. It speaks highly of Reg but gives crucial information and good details about his life and accomplishments. I think with a man like this, it is hard to take a stance on something that seems to be a neutral topic.

The only issue I see with sources could potentially be the order of the sources, the first one is about his stint in the olympics where it should be about his accomplishments with action learning or his merits as a teacher.

I found a couple grammatical issues in the article and found parts in the early life section to not be as clear and concise as the rest of it.

There isn't any images on the page and I think that could enhance the pages overall feel and look.

Overall, I think the articles strengths are the way they speak highly of his achievements and describe action learning in a detailed fashion, but I think there is parts that aren't concise that can be fleshed out.