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Tutorial 1- Wk 3

Activity 1

Article: Shiba Inu

First edit was on the 13th of December 2001, which was the introduction. The introduction has been edited many times, making its main points a bit muddled. If I created the article first, I would make sure the introduction is clear and concise, with its main points in a specific order. The current introduction repeats several facts, for example the Shiba Inu’s size is stated twice, at the beginning of the introduction and at the end.

If I was a second reader, I would put the information in order of relevancy, and with what most people would want to know about. For example, I would but the description of the Shiba Inu at the start and then the etymology towards the end.