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Page: Cristiano Ronaldo
The first edit of Cristiano Ronaldo's Wikipedia page was mainly dedicated to his footballing career following his transfer to Manchester United. Probably influenced by his rapid increase in fame at the time, the page relies on anecdote rather than statistics to describe Ronaldo and feels incomplete in relation to his personal background. This may be because he hadn't reached the level of notability he has now; but, nonetheless, if I had created the page I would have included such details and statistics about Ronaldo's career (although short), so as to give a more accurate and detailed description of his person. Furthermore, a lot of the information is un-referenced. As a second editor, I would have tried to find sources for the information provided about Ronaldo and the critiques of his footballing ability. A photograph of Ronaldo would have been added as well.

Tutorial 3, Activity 1 - Citation Hunt
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Morris_County,_New_Jersey#cite_note-16

Added citation no. 16.

Topic 6: Article Update
Zero tolerance (schools)

Edited language to reflect encyclopaedic standards.