User:Paulaacocal/Barbara Kopple/Vicccshi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Paulaacocal


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Paulaacocal/Barbara_Kopple?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Barbara Kopple

Evaluate the drafted changes
There are new information reflected in the updated lead and it included content that is not in the original article. The lead is concise but I think there can be more information to makes the overview more comprehensive. The introductory sentence is clear but I think it is from the original article. The information she added is an really important information for us to understand this filmmaker in terms of her' achievement.

The content she added in relevant to the topic and are all useful information. The content is up-to-date and are all from there are no contents that are not belong to the reference. The tone is neutral and there is no overrepresented or underrepresented issue in the content, and the content is well-written and not grammatical issues. Meanwhile, the sources are all clearly cited and they are all from reliable literatures or journals. However, I think it will be better if you can add more additional information according to your sources.

She didn't incorporate any images in her content but added link to other articles to help us better understand her point. The article also contains necessary section headings, and her content accurately represent her sources. However, I think she could do more research to incorporate more sources.

In all, I think the contents she added improve the original article and make the article more complete. But it think it will be better to incorporate more things from the sources or do more research to find more sources to elaborate on this filmmaker. Right now, most of the contents are still from the original article and the content you added is not tha exhaustive. From the content you've already incorporated, I see your good understand of the sources and you have a strong summarizing skill. As a result, if you can add more your own content, the article will get a significant improvement for sure!