User:Pavneetah/Chonolith/LoveTheExperience Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pavneetah


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pavneetah/Chonolith


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chonolith

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead or overview of section is clear, concise and flows well. I think that the lead section is great and the only recommendation I would make is to add links to the other Wikipedia pages for the mentioned specific shapes of other plutonic structures: dikes, sills, laccoliths and sheets.

Content
The original article was severely lacking in information. The additions made by Pavneetah have greatly improved this page and made it more of a legitimate page with a much better coverage. The additions touch on the composition, creation, and examples of Chololiths leading the reader to a much better understanding of the topic. I believe that the article would benefit from an image to bring a visual representation of the topic to the reader. The information is all current and up to date.

-Structure and Organization
The structure and organization of the revamp for the page are well thought out in logical order and easy to follow. The information in each section builds on what was previously talked about as to not confuse the reader.

There is a space missing between the third and fourth sentences in the overview.

-Talk Page
There is nothing mentioned on the talk page, however on topic that would benefit from being discussed on the talk page is the section on how they are formed. This section could be linked to dikes, sills, laccoliths and sheets if the formation is the same. Perhaps the other pages could be linked here for information of formation?

-Clarity
The page is very clear and flows well. The information is well cited and easy to follow. Pavneetah clearly went to a lot of effort to have a high level of clarity for the page

-Balanced Coverage
The coverage of this page is well balanced from a variety of sources. The page talks about what a chonolith is how its formed and includes numerous examples from various areas. There are two examples missing citations which would help the overall balance of the article.

-Neutrality
The page is very neutral. Pavneetah went to great effort to make it that way by adding numerous sources and not depending on any one in particular. The page is informative but not swaying the reader in any way.

Sources and References
The sources used for this article are all live links and relevant to the topic. Useful information is extracted from each to benefit the page. In the examples section, sources could be added for the last two examples to add accreditation to the presented information. Here is one for the first example missing a citation.

Chonolith of Cretaceous age in the Cortez Mountains, near Carlin in Nevada, USA.

Herman L. Bauer Jr., James J. Cooper, Richard A. Breitrick (1960) Porphyry Copper Deposits in the Robinson Mining District White Pine County, Nevada, Utah Geological Association pg 220-228 http://archives.datapages.com/data/uga/data/010/010001/220_ugs100220.htm

Overall Impression and Suggestions for Improvement
The additions made to this page greatly increase the value of the page. The page has gone from a couple of lines on the topic to a full blown informative page on the topic.

Suggestions for improvement are

-       A space between the third and fourth sentences

-       Adding two citations, one for each example that is currently missing a citation

-       Adding links for related terms to their individual Wikipedia pages (dikes, sills, laccoliths and sheets)