User:Payton Frankiewicz/Terena people/Rileybuus Peer Review

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I think the overview could be more general. Right now its basically the history of the people rather than an overview of the article.

rearrange the history section so it makes more chronological sense rather than going backwards in time.

For the society and way of life, I feel like this needs more information. Specifically the crafting section could have some more description on why and how they make the crafts and what they do with them. For the marriage part, maybe just turn it into more of a religion section since you talk about what they believe in and add some more to it.

Add more about the farm incident and expulsion (ex. what the tribes response was)

Move the dialect section to earlier in the article rather than the end. I think it would be best ended with the farm incident since that is the most modern thing that has happened.