User:Pdh1997/Bone density/Rballena Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Pdh1997)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Bone density


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bone density

Evaluate the drafted changes
Positive feedback:

- I appreciate you adding the section of genetics because it is much needed for this topic. Great job on using high impact review articles as your first references.

- Your table is very well designed and your two sources for this topic are credible.

Constructive feedback:

- You wrote "(cite from risk factor paper above)" at the end of a sentence. Thoughts on possibly just including the citation? and taking out the parentheses.

- For the table, thoughts on including a legend or at least some explanation somewhere that AR = autosomal recessive? I think it could help readers who don't automatically know what AR signifies understand what it means if you put AR = autosomal recessive.