User:Pdh1997/Bone density/Rwile Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pdh1997 and TomasAlamin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Bone density and https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Pdh1997/Bone_density?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bone density

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article is laid out in a very clear manner, and it was very easy to follow! The content is all relevant to the topic of bone density and is up to date.

For the prevention section, it may be helpful to have subsections such as micronutrients (with information on calcium and vitamin D intake), exercise (with information on weight-bearing and resistance exercises), and pharmacological therapies (with information on estrogens, bisphosphonates, etc.). I think sectioning it out in this way may allow you to include more detailed information on the different types of low bone density prevention strategies.

For the Genetic Diseases Associated with Bone Mineral Density section, I would include more of a description of some of the diseases or hyperlink the Wikipedia pages for the diseases so readers are able to see or easily access further details about Osteogenesis Imperfecta, Osteoporosis Pseudoglioma Syndrome, etc. Also, make sure to add in the citation for the sentence, "Because of the heritability of Bone Mineral Density, family history of fractures is considered as a risk factor for osteoporosis."

Overall, this article gave a great overview of the relevant topics to bone density. The content added was all neutral and the sources added were current. I think prevention strategies and genetics related to bone density were great choices for additions to the article. Great job!