User:Peanutdoll/Li Yu (director)/CherylnVerlin Peer Review

General info
Peanutdoll
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Peanutdoll/Li Yu (director)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Li Yu (director)

Lead
The lead section of the article has not been adjusted, thus I believe the original lead is sufficient and concisely describes Li Yu's basic information and career achievement. It focuses mainly on Li Yu's career experience about her transition of career directions and production. There could be some more informations about Li Yu's film production if there is anything to add into the lead.

Content
The content you added is highly relevant to Li Yu as a female filmmaker. It is relatively up-to-date, including the informations and interviews from the filmmaker herself as well as other professionals within the film industry. The added content includes Li Yu's early life and career, which is the main body for the article to improve as the original article did not include this information in an elaborated way. Your paragraph on Li Yu's personal life as an advocate for women's rights is also organized and concise.

Tone and Balance
Your tone in the content you added is mostly neutral and there is no clear biases in your words and phrases. Except some of the language in the Directorial career section can be seen as persuasive and slightly lack neutrality. Even though your intention is not to persuade viewers into one certain perspective, some phrases you had can be a little bit confused. You did a good job in balancing the portions of the articles as you focused mainly on Li Yu's career as a female director in China and her films that represents her view of women's position. The personal life section also balanced the article in a way as introducing Li Yu as the director.

Sources and References
All the new content you added is backed up by reliable secondary source, and you managed to paraphrase as well as translate the contents into the wikipedia article form. The sources are mostly thorough and current with only a few outdated due to the time when Li Yu has been written on in the media. It would be better if you can have more academic journal sources that comment on Li Yu and her films. The links to the sources are stable and works well.

Organization
The content you added is concise and easy-to-read, with only a few grammatical or vocabulary errors that you might want to double check to phrase it in a more accurate way. The paragraphs are broken down into appropriate organization and they are generally in a good structure.

Overall impressions
This is a really good draft for completing and improving the wikipedia page of Li Yu. The content added improves the quality of the article as a whole and expands more information about the female director. The languages are really clear and the structure is easy for viewers to read and interpret. It can be written better if you could have include more academic resources from different perspectives. Overall, it is a really good improvement on Li Yu's career as a female filmmaker.