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In class this week the concept of consciousness raising came up, so I thought I would look around and see what was on Wikipedia about consciousness raising for this exercise.


 * 1) Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

yes, everything in the article is relevant to the article topic and nothing distracted

'''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added'''

nothing was out of date and nothing was really missing that could be added, except the #metoo campaign


 * 1) What else could be improved?
 * 2) * The Etymology section
 * 3) Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * 4) Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? underrepresented because the writer could have gone into more detail.
 * 5) Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? the links work and the source does support the claims in the article.
 * 6) Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? yes, each fact is referenced with a reliable reference and the information comes from other wiki articles and they are neutral, unless stated otherwise.
 * 7) What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? no conversations are going on
 * 8) How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? im not sure where to find how the article is rated

10/7/18
Lewis, Jone Johnson. (2018, June 14). Cultural Feminism. Retrieved from https://www.thoughtco.com/cultural-feminism-definition-3528996 (original article)

Krischer, Hayley. “Are Girls Really Living in a 'Post-Feminist' World?” The Atlantic, Atlantic Media Company, 12 July 2017, www.theatlantic.com/education/archive/2017/07/everyday-sexism-in-a-post-feminist-world/533241/.

first draft
Cultural feminists argue that what they define as traditional male behaviors, including aggressiveness, competitiveness, and domination, are harmful to society and to particular fields within society, including business and politics. Instead, the cultural feminist argues, emphasizing caring, cooperation, and egalitarianism would make a better world. Those who argue that women are biologically or inherently more kind, caring, nurturing, and cooperative, also argue then for more inclusion of women in decision-making processes in society and in particular fields within society. Traditional male behaviors is very similar to toxic masculinity. toxic masculinity refers to the ways that how men need to behave a certain way in society. Some examples of toxic masculinity are views on parenting, "biological drive", and emotionlessness (anger is only accepted). These traditional male behaviors that are not only normalized, but accepted in this society. The United Staes has had an issue in the media with this because of all the mass shootings.

Final Article
Cultural feminists are arguing on what defines traditional male behaviors. With research, it was founded that it could include aggressiveness, competitiveness, and domination, are harmful to society and to particular fields within society, including business and politics. Instead, the cultural feminist argues, emphasizing caring, cooperation, and egalitarianism would make a better world. Those who argue that women are biologically or inherently more kind, caring, nurturing, and cooperative, also argue then for more inclusion of women in decision-making processes in society and in particular fields within society. Traditional male behaviors is very similar to toxic masculinity. Toxic masculinity refers to the ways of how men need to behave a certain way in order to fit into society. Some examples of toxic masculinity are views on parenting, "biological drive", and emotionlessness (anger is only accepted). These traditional male behaviors that are not only normalized, but accepted in this society. Furthermore, The United States has recently seen an issue with this the media within the last few years because of all the mass shootings.

The Representation Project made a video in 2013 called “The Mask You Live In”. In the start of the video, it showed boys roughly ranging from the ages of four and fifty. While showing the boys, the audio had voices from what seemed like their fathers. The things that were being said was very degrading; for-example, “stop with the emotions” and “you’re a fag” (which was said numerous times). America has constructed such a stereotypical ideal masculinity imagine that does not allow young boys to feel comfortable in their own masculinity; they feel a need to go prove how masculine they are all the time. Since we live in a culture that feminises emotions, there is a negative effect on boys and men. This negative effect could include aggression. Less than 50% of boys and men with mental health challenges seek help. Every day three or more boys commit suicide in the United States. Oppressing boys and men to fit into this unrealistic masculinity is not only hurting the person, but it is hurting society as a whole.

In the next article, “The Boys Are Not All Right”, it said within the last fifty years, women and feminity have completely redefined itself. Men and their masculinity have stayed the same. Women and girls are growing and becoming more powerful while men and boys are doing the opposite. They are self destructing, “Too many boys are trapped in the same suffocating, outdated model of masculinity, where manhood is measured in strength, where there is no way to be vulnerable without being emasculated, where manliness is about having power over others.” Mass shootings are rising at an immense rate.

Lastly, boy and girls are raised too differently from one another. Gloria Steinem said it perfectly, “I’m glad we’ve begun to raise our daughters more like our sons, but it will never work until we raise our sons more like our daughters”. Women’s roles cannot expand if men don't. It is not all just about women, men are falling behind in work and school because we are not raising boys to succeed in the new, pink, feminine economy. Skills that typically are considered to be feminine, such as, empathy, diligence and, cooperation are severely lacked within men and it is considered “gay” if  you obtain one of those traits.