User:Pegahabdolkarimi/Water treatment/Sepidehmsh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pegahabdolkarimi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pegahabdolkarimi/Water treatment


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Water treatment

Evaluate the drafted changes
Here is some friendly feedback based on my knowledge for you interesting article :).

The overall structure of the article is clear and well established. an the content is neutral. Content describes important technics and process.

I can see that, you added a introduction to the article. Don't you think it's better to start the introductory sentence with the title of the topic? I think it will give a quick information of the topic.

The content you added to the articles is related to the topic and well-described and easy to follow. Even if the original article has many citations and information, you added so many other information and citations, showing the importance and broadness of the topic.

From my point of view, adding the treatment technologies is a great idea that improves the content of the articles. I know that there is a technology called "phytoremediation" which can be used in wastewater treatment. You might consider mentioning in in your article. (I am not sure if it fits the content, its just a suggestion from my side).

There are two sources with a red parts which is related to the date. I suppose you can fix them by going to edit your references.

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Thank you for your kind feedback Sepideh. I tried to correct and organize the structure of the first paragraph as you mentioned. Also, I added another paragraph to it to elaborate more. In this article, I tried to mention and explain the primary remediation methods, but they can be categorized into various forms and methods which I didn't thoroughly cover. I also will correct my citations.

Thank you so much.