User:Peinini/Genocide justification/Amacalus Peer Review

General info
Peinini
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Peinini/Genocide_justification?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Genocide justification

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Conciseness
I believe some of the phrasing of sentences could be more concise, or split into separate sentences. Even some of the verbage is a bit difficult to read. For instance the sentence, "Justification and rationalization are common with regard to the Armenian genocide, as the perpetrators portrayed the killings as legitimate defense against Armenians, who were perceived as traitors and colluding with Russia during a time of war." It's long with many cases and viewpoints and topics introduced. Splitting it into two or three sentences introducing each idea separately would help with readability.

Everything provided relates to the article. I understand this is about genocide justification so it's on why these people believe it's justified, but I think including both sides of the coin may be helpful in understanding the matter, as reasoning behind genocide is incredibly multi-faceted.