User:Peinini/Genocide justification/Jlk004 Peer Review

General info
Peinini
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Peinini/Genocide_justification?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Genocide justification

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

It seems that the lead section in the draft was used not to draft the lead of the article, but to summarize the changes that were to be made in the body section. I see that the lead was edited in the actual article, though.Armenian genocide

Content: The content is well-written and well-cited, and seems up to date. It does indeed address Wikipedia's equity gaps.

Tone: There is a neutral point of view and nothing seems biased in any way. Points of view are sufficiently balanced, addressing multiple sources all from different journals.

Sources: Good scope of sources, numerous enough not to be heavily biased towards one viewpoint. However, the quotes may be a tad too long, and replaceable by a synthesized summary.

Organization: Conciseness could be worked on in terms of how quotes are dealt with. "States" and "stated" seems to be used again and again. Summaries could be inter-spliced between the longer quotations.

Media: No media was added.