User:Penguinblueberry/DeepFace/Hotpink789! Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Penguinblueberry


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Penguinblueberry/DeepFace


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * DeepFace

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- Great intro! It explains the topic very clearly and in an understandable manner.

- I would clarify the following sentence: "DeepFace shows human-level performance." Because this is the first time readers will be reading this, they may be confused on what human-level performance entails, so I would include something along the lines of human-level performance with regard to accuracy.

Commercial Rollout

- include space after "Tel Aviv University."

- No comma needed after Yaniv Taigman in last sentence of first paragraph

- first sentence second paragraph: comma should go before citation

- extra spaces in last sentence of second paragraph before the word "notification" and "option"

- last paragraph first sentence: period should go before citation

Method

- make sure to include citation for where you got this information

Reactions

- period should go before quotes in last sentence

Controversy

- The first and last sentence seems redundant. I would delete the last sentence.

Tone and Balance

- neutral tone!

- I'm wondering if there were any positive reactions to DeepFace. That would be interesting to read since you talk about the criticisms

Organization

- Really easy to read! Flows smoothly

Images

- No images or media