User:PerkinsonSC/Challis Volcanics/Karcherrk Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PerkinsonSC


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:PerkinsonSC/Challis Volcanics
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Challis Volcanics

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the lead, if you wanted to make it more concise you could move the sentence about stratigraphic relations down to the geology section. I would also spilt this sentence into two sentences: "Named by C.P. Ross in 1934, for the town of Challis, Idaho near the study area, this formation contains intermediate, mafic, and felsic volcanic rocks in addition to a very limited amount of fossils."

For the volcanic history section, you could elaborate on what was driving the vulcanism in the region. If the literature covers it, you could also explain why some of the eruptions were more explosive and why some were less explosive. It may also be a good idea to explain the geological setting prior to these igneous processes were taking in just a sentence or two.

For the geology section, I would explain the specific units that make up this formation. You could make sub headers for units and explain each one in terms of mineralogy, structure, and how they are defined and differentiated from other units. This would also make it easy for you to explain the mineralogy of the formation as a whole, since the units are likely to be grouped on mineralogy anyway.

I'm not sure how much you can say about the fossil content because of how rare they seem to be, so it may be beneficial for you to have the fossil content as a sub header. If you create sub headers for the specific units in the Challis Volcanics, you could make the fossil content a sub-sub header to whichever unit is the fossil bearing unit.

In your lead, you mention "extensive faulting throughout the Challis Volcanics' history.", however this is not explored on your page. You could make the volcanic history section into a geologic history section, which would give you a place to talk about the causes of this faulting, as well as the erosional history of the area and the causes for the vulcanism.

Overall, this page is well written and is very wide as far as the information about the Challis Volcanics. I believe your page would benefit from a deeper look at the history of this formation, as well as an exploration the mineralogy and the named units of the formation, assuming there are any. Of course, make sure to add the citations and figures.

I went ahead and changed that one long sentence in the lead, as well as fixed a couple of grammatical/ flow errors.

I like your Wikipedia page Seth! I hope you have been doing well throughout these strange semesters. I also hope we'll get another opportunity to share an in person class next semester!